WOW writing

We have been working on making our writing more interesting for other people to read! We are putting in WOW words and adding details. 

Here are some examples:

Miss Simpkins' sentence 'I went on my bike down the road' got changed to...

'Me and my little sister rode on my bike. 'Clatter-clatter' down the street'

By Zahir and James

'My bike zoomed along the road' 

OR

'Zoom! My bike went along the bumpy road.'

By Levi and Tawera

Anna changed her own sentence from "I went home afterwards" to...

"I stomped home afterwards because I was tired and grumpy."

Brooklyn changed her sentence from "That night I had a sleepover with Paytan" to...

"That really dark night I had a sleepover with the amazing Paytan"

WOW! What amazing writing!